THE MOVEMENT FEEDBACK

This is the feedback for 'The Movement' final cut we did. I also took  notes from the feedback from the groups because some of their mistakes applied to our cut.

Me and Sebastian's Feedback

• The cut is still in the assembly stage. 
• We are still spending too much time establishing Addie and we need to fix the structure. 
• Its not until half way we get outside of his room and show other things.
• There's 2 types of movements: Addie's poem called 'The Escape Movement' and the Sheffield poetry movement which involves the other poets. 
• Technical problems: the sound is distorted at the last scene and that was because of the export.

From this, I kind of understand where our mistakes are. We should be treating this edit as if it was clay and needs to be moulded into something magnificent. "In-order to make something new, you must sometimes destroy the old". This involves re-writing what Addie's is saying to create a story and a character that the audience can connect with.

Nyle and Jamie's Feedback

I enjoyed watching their edit. It was different from what everyone else had done and they were really creative in the way they portrayed Addie. One thing I learned from their cut is to use clips that are relevant to the story I want to tell. Even though the documentary is about Addie, I have the choice to tell something completely different. 

Beth and Andrew's Feedback

This piece was also good. It made me consider about the cut away's and how they link in to what Addie is saying. Which is to show evidence for every accession that Addie makes. We must keep it travelling from scene to scene (20 seconds in and out) and not stay too long on one thing. I think this is what Chris is emphasising that we mustn't spend too much time on what Addie is talking about. We must be brutal and cut his lines if we have too. 

Alex and Heather

I really liked the feedback that they got. This was always end at the end of a thought, word or phrase and begin at the start of a thought or idea or word. Do not repeat and scenes unless its really important. And lastly if you cant tell a story about something, then fin another story to tell with the footage. 

This links in well with the clay concept, If the current object your making is not working, make something different. And I believe this is what we must do. To take a different point of view to Addie and tell something else. 

Emily and Bronte

If you get a shot, let it breathe. The content they had was good but it just needs to be organised. This made me think of a jigsaw puzzle and try different ways of arranging our ideas as it might help us with the editing.

Louis and Laurence

They used a political song in a poetic documentary which is wrong to a certain point because we heard the lyrics. If it was the beat, it would have worked. This made me think of trying to add music to the film as it could help tell a better story.